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My soul is set on perfect,
Engulfed by your embrace.
My heart stood next to frozen,
Softened by your fingerís trace.

Iím hypnotized,
By the way you breathe.
My oxygen,
Is the love you weave.

Foreverís closing in;
Eternity.
And soon weíll be,
Infinity.

My skin is set on passion,
Excited by your touch.
Maybe Iím too dramatic.
Maybe I think too much.

Iím mesmerized,
By your simple grin.
Iím bounded by,
The love within.

Foreverís closing in;
Eternity.
And soon weíll be,
Infinity.
I'm so hyper and floaty.

:heart:


o.O Well, it still looks cool backwards :p
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:iconlp-lover:
LP-lover Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2008
I know you can't read this but this is very beautiful Ian.
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agnijith Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Touching, full of emotion and imagination...
I just love it.
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youliedanyway Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
This is a lovely poem. Your poetry is very good. it is so full of emotion and so heartfelt. I just LOVE it so much! I wish I could fave it all, but I need to go to bed an study, please keep posting more!!!

oh, btw, I've friended you, and, since I like your poetry so DAMN much, I'm gonna tell people to read it wether your friend me back or not. Just so you know. I'll be out there, soliciting for ya!
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whitefeathered-raven Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2006   Writer
This makes me cry...'cause I just lost someone I love... And because this is so well done that I can relate to it....such a good job...
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Reioa-DeFoe Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
I love this because it's pretty accurate to how people in love feel. It's a wonderful work. ^^
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wetblackink Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2006   Writer
^_^
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Shyhone Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2006
aww thats so cute
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2006
:D thanks!
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Deep-Ponderer Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2006   Photographer
Pure Beauty.
Really though, this is undescribable for words. It's impossible to explain how "amazing" (is all i can think of) this poem is in the English Language, and any other language for that matter.
It's that great.
I admire you.
Your gift is perfect, suiting you wholy, fully, totally.
Extra favage.
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ElaclairesSkies Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2006
Aw, this is so cute :heart: I'd put up some of my personal poems, but I don't know if they'd be as good as this

:love: it
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FullOfLies24 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2006
This is a great piece. I love it. Nice job!
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TheSp00n Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2006   Writer
sorry to be critical but it doesnít quite work for me
there's some good lines and the whole peace flows very well

the description seems too logical for a romantic poem, but i cannot decided whether "Maybe I think too much." implies that this was a conscious decision

also the 'chorus' section flows very well but without actually saying much

however the piece is well written and feeling behind it is clear enough

good stuff:)
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rixwerld Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006   Writer
:nod:good piece:nod:
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VictoriaHarte Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006   Writer
So lovely, great rhyming pattern and wonderfully written. I like this a lot
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suk0shi-hamu Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
Very nice poem sweetie :aww:
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GothicXpress Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely, immutably, seriously beautiful. :) Great job. :+favlove:
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Denzai Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
i forgot to finish my comment!!

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lol your poetry is so honest and bare; not crytic at all. like... your not afraid to say whats truly there

and its always so dang cute!!
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Denzai Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
lol sex poetry!!
(or am i just being perverted??)
yaay!
lol
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
yusss youre being perverted :p
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Denzai Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2006
well... thats my interpretation! lol
it does kinda seem like sex poetry tho... but gentler than most
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pink-lettuce-leaf Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
Aw I like it unn :D very good
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jinubean Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
how sweet!

i adore the rhyme scheme you used for this one, it's so simple yet it works wonders!
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chibishi Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
This is an extremely lovely poem. :hug: It makes you feel all warm and fuzzy.
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dontbotherme Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
awww thats sweet beyond infinity! xDDD
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neurotic-elf Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006  Professional General Artist
oooooh :love: !! :clap:
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Chuchkit Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
Did i tell you ur talanted?
Arr.... Pleasure reading your works.
Really really. :+favlove:
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P.S-
Made smt'n. In my gallery.
Thought you might like it. :)
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alienENOID Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006  Student Traditional Artist
aaaaw. . .its so beautiful!! <3 this is the first poem i ever Really liked!!
im also jealous of you and azu!! in love and extremely talented!! :excited: aheheh
*stuffs into faves* :fave:
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AmusantVerteYeux Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
c'est tres bien et tres beau!!!!!!!!!!! the way you use your words are :wow: , brilliant! you are a true romantic poet :D :thumbsup: :clap:
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empty-phantom Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006   Photographer
....Jeepers. I love (not strong enough of a word hear darn it) how you express yourself in your poems. All of your emotions can be found in them. ^-^ You can tell that you are truly in love and will last for an Infinity.
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downward----spiral Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
that poem was amazing!
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itsmeagain Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
oohh my goodness you are SO AMAZING!! it like...almost HURTS HOW GOOD YOU ARE!!!!! wow...wow....i mean every piece of yours just hits me in the face and explodes in little hearts and...stuff. hahaha man this is good. of course its good YOU wrote it!
jeff is one lucky boy O.o
this is perfect, the feeling just evaporates from every single line of every single word.
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itsmeagain Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
oohh my goodness you are SO AMAZING!! it like...almost HURTS HOW GOOD YOU ARE!!!!! wow...wow....i mean every piece of yours just hits me in the face and explodes in little hearts and...stuff. hahaha man this is good. of course its good YOU wrote it!
jeff is one lucky boy O.o
this is perfect, the feeling just evaporates from every single line of every single word.
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RifledGrave Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
:) i like this
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LostDot Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Eee, I love it. ;D
Mm. Keep writing, it always makes my day to read your poems. n__n
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spreadingmywings Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
aww more adorable-ness... floaty is cool!!! and rainbow bubbles! um..yeah..what was i saying? oh yeah CUTE. love it.
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oddballgirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Gah! *slam* i don't get how people can ryhme. i'll just stick with asking people what ryhmes with what. although, they don't answer me anymore. hm...oh wellz. Wow Ian! You're really good! Awesome talent! you should try to get published. you could. yup. sorry if i don't sound enthustiastic (can't spell) head...hurts...advil doesn't work anymore. meh. keep up your awesome ness! :)
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xXMinnaXx Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
^____________________^ gahh!! Ian you..are AMAZING!!!! you have on hell of an awesome gift boy!! I LOVE YOUR STUFF!! it just.....makes me happy whenever i read it!! :D I smile with every line!!! I can always count on you for anything!! Wow ian!! you are....gahh! i have no words to explain it!! JEFF IS SOO LUCKY!! T-T IM JEALOUS!!! D: gaahhh! wish you were mines!! O_O but great piece boy! magnificent~
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
lol Wow! Thats was so sweet lol. Sorry I'll never be anyone's bt *take a guess* :)
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xXMinnaXx Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
^_____^ You deserve comments like that hun! :heart:
Hmm!! I wonder who!!

JJJJJJEEEEEEEEEFFFFFFFFFF!!!!!!!!!!! x3

>W< Gaah! You guys are so adorable!! I love seeing you guys together!! Hope it stays that way forever!! :D
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EternalMisery Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Omg, almost sickenly sweet................. but it so nice!!!
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Yuss yusss....I'm good at making people sick :-B
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EternalMisery Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Well, right now it's a good kind of sick. ^^
*almost squeals with innner joy*
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Cu-Ifrinn Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Thats beautiful. Oh I'm all fuzzy inside *squee*
I know someone I love like that but... there are circumstances. I'm so happy you have someone, someone you can be with too. Lol! There that ramble is proof your poems touch people. You talented thing you! *hugs* Thanks I needed to be warm and fuzzy for a while.
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Cu-Ifrinn Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Thats beautiful. Oh I'm all fuzzy inside *squee*
I know someone I love like that but... there are circumstances. I'm so happy you have someone, someone you can be with too. Lol! There that ramble is proof your poems touch people. You talented thing you! *hugs* Thanks I needed to be warm and fuzzy for a while.
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caytea Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006  Student General Artist
your work is always so perfect =) it comes from the heart, and a great deal of talent and work
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azuzephre Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006  Student
<33333333333333333333333 your poetry always renders me useless. i'll prolly be cuddly and all curled up thinking about this in my bed in just a sec. *is cold* : D

i love you <3
Jeff
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
My mom was watching the rose parade and I was like omg Jeff's gonna drowwwwn its all rainy. *is your umbrella*
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mmp13 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2007
I love this one. keep writing.


xoxoxoxo,
mmp13
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ImitationOfLife Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
Wow, that was absolutely awesome. Its short but has amazing feeling to it. Definitely a fav.
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angelyn Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2006
this is defanately in the extremely excelent categorie :D jajajaja have you ever thought about making your poems into music?Ņ they have a very lyrical quality that defanetly has great song potential
isn't interesting how love and happiness affects our artwork jajaj i do have to say it has had a positive effect on yours jajja :D
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