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I know it's wrong,
But an envious shade of green has found a life around my skin.
I am wrong,
But everyone you see today will talk to you again.
So I am pissed off at your friends;
They get to sit near you again;
They get to look at you again;
And I just write to you with a lonley hand.
I'm envious.

I know it's wrong,
But the jealousy and anger's taken hold inside my mind.
I am wrong,
But everyone you're near today can see you all the time.
So, I am pissed off at your friends;
They get to walk with you again;
They get to talk to you again;
And I just wait for loneliness to end.
I'm envious.

I shouldn't sound insane, but they can all go screw.
It's sucks that I'm not filling the space right next to you.

I know it's wrong,
But I'm choking on my sorrow and I have been for a while.
I am wrong,
But everyone you're with today will get to see you smile.
So, I am pissed off at your friends;
They get to laugh with you again;
They get to joke with you again;
And I can only dream I'm one of them.
I'm envious.
Oh, I dunno. I was just being pissy cause everyone gets to hang out with my boyfriend except for me :-/
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:iconchuchkit:
Chuchkit Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2006
awwww.....
:cry:
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:iconthe-perfect-failure:
The-Perfect-Failure Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
know it's wrong,
But I'm choking on my sorrow and I have been for a while.
I am wrong,
But everyone you're with today will get to see you smile. (*thumbs up*)

*sniff* I love you o___o Your poetry is ... is .... is ... *melt*

:hug:
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:icon3hoursaway:
3HoursAway Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2005
thanks :)
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:iconthe-perfect-failure:
The-Perfect-Failure Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
:D No problem! And welcome! *runs off to print your poems and smother them across her walls* XD lol
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coolvamp007 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2005
WOW! So beautiful and full of feeling! I understand exactly what you mean cuz I used to have the same problem with a guy. But dont worry, I bet your boyfriend will understand too and both will solve the problem! =)
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Nymphal Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005
not sure what your situation is but it really sounds like you rarely see your significant other. it makes me feel pathetic... i can hardly go 2 days! it is all because i'm used to waking him up every single morning for school and having breakfast with him, now we have opposite scheduals between his school and my work. he heads to the bars sometimes with they guys, and i can go because i'm too young.

i really enjoy your writing, very simple and straight to the point. sometimes the simple things in life get overlooked when they are truely the most beautiful. keep it up, hope to read more from you.

Tara
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DarkRaven21 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2005
..Sorry to hear it :(...:hug:..
..I hope you could meet with him by now.....
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2005
lol me too!
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DarkRaven21 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2005
..:D...
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empty-phantom Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005   Photographer
I know what you mean but its not his friends alone they're my friends too. and It bothers me so MUCH.
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vanillakat88 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2005  Student
such a beautiful poem...:+fav: it portrays so well how I'm feeling at the moment...jealous...:'(
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2005
im glad you liiiked it
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SilveryNightsky Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
Ian! Stop exposing my faults as well NYEEH
Joke, joke. But I get ya... Completely... I get immensely jealous (envious, whatever heh) too. I'm also in a long distance relationship. I got jealous of his step sister, okay -.- Now that is beyond wrong. His real life friends, even online friends too because they get to webcam with him whenever they want (I'm not allowed one), and and.. it's a horrible feeling. You want to stop being possessive (might as well say it out loud - that's what jealousy IS) but you just can't, hey?

At least Jeff cares enough about you to get jealous as well, no? And he's not afraid to show it either = P Feel loved! hehehe

btw, I love how you don't try to use big long words to 'impress' your readers (many poets do that - many-a-times they overdo it.) Get the angst and frustration out! Woot! Very to the point, with detail as well.

*keeps watching
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
:) its really hard, but its working soo good for right now which is great! I hoe yours works out. Thanks for reading all this stuff :) yea I just talk like people talk lol.
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SilveryNightsky Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2005
Hope I'm not being nosy but you and Jeff have got me really intrigued. If you don't mind me asking, will you be meeting up with each other this summer? I'm seeing my bf in 4 days so that's pretty much what's got me curious. I don't know many people who are in long distance relationships.
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2005
Definately planning on meeting this summer! not soon enough really
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suk0shi-hamu Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
it won't be long until you're togetheeeeer! :aww:
:cuddle:
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tarnishedhope Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
awh :hug: i know how you feel so i hope you get to see him soon, but don't worry he looovves you :D :aww: really nice poem though, i hope that writing it made you feel somewhat better because sometimes that helps...or kicking something helps too...but writing is more productive...well hope you're feeling better:)
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
It made me feel way better :)
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tarnishedhope Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2005
thats good :aww: keep up the brilliant writing
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jinubean Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Wow, that is totally the way i'm feeling right now holy crap! *reads it again* yup that's it... except your tone is a little lighter the second time around,
I love the emotion that comes from me when i read your poetry, is it meant to be a song? Because i noticed the little bridge thing in there

I'm going to have to fav this
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
I usually have a tune in mind just so i can get a rhythm going, but I dunno if it would be a song lol
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jinubean Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
i think it would make an awesome punk song <---obsessed with punk
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billybob110288 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
awww dont feel soo bad...hope you feel better brother:) i love that poem and hope you get to see jeff soon :hug:
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:icon3hoursaway:
3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
Thanks! me too :-p
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darkangelxx Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Waiting is torture, and so is knowing other people get to see the one you love more than you. But I bet he'd rather be with you than all of them. I'm sure he would. :hug:
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
:) Thanks that made me feel squissshhhy !
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darkangelxx Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
Hehe, well its true. =D
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ShatterdSoul Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
<3 it
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
:)
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deirdre-a Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
:hug: aaw. hope you see him soon :) i do love the poem though, i like the structure.
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
thannk you :)
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ewiechan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
:( your 2 are seperated becoz you life on 2 diffferent places....'he' lives across the street, so near yet so far! >cries<! >hugs<
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2005
Thats close! :-D
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celina-chan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Aww. As always excellent peice.

Heh, I know a bit of how you're feeling, I think. I live on different continents from my guy. Stupid time zones don't help, either. -_- Anyways, hope you two get to see each other soon. ^_^
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Ya time zones can kiss my white ass!! :-D
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celina-chan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
XD Agreed. Whoever came up with them needs to be sporked or stoned or something similar.
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Jam-o Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
:glomp:
wiating takes forever it seems..
but then i gusse in the end it would be worth it..
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
It would be nice if the waiting was over...but I'll wait as long as it takes :)
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Jam-o Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2005
yeah the waiting part always sucks..
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sithpelladal Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
You have every right to be pissy. it's understandable. I like it. it flows well together.
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Thank you for the comments!
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neurotic-elf Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005  Professional General Artist
:petting:

*sigh* ..haven't we all been there, felt this way.. ouff.. *sigh*

patience.. as long as you two know you'll be together soon, is the only thing you can actually do right now.. even if it sucks and makes you feel sad+lonely.. :(

patience + never forget to show him how much you care/love/thinking of him.. :heart:


*the-look-who's-talking-now elven advice!!* ;p
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
:-D thanks!
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neurotic-elf Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005  Professional General Artist
you're welcome !! :D
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Giolythe Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Everyone has the right to be jealous sometimes. It's really whether or not you let it comtrol you and turn you into an ugly person. I don't think you're one to do that; you feel bad about being jealous (obviously). Usually those that become "ugly" don't see a problem within themselves, they usually only see it in others and react badly to it. ... enoug of the ramble (was losing track of though while typing). You'll see him in preson, and you'll be with him eventually. Just gonna "have" to be patient, although sometimes that's not what you really want (assuming that actaully is true). Anyway, good luck.
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
:) Yea...generally I'm patient. Time's moved so quickyl already, but you know...everyone has their moments lol
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LadyPeruch Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005  Professional General Artist
Awww I know where comin from. But you do get to see him right? Cause I cant see mine yet he lives in america.
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3HoursAway Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2005
Newp Dont get to see him cause he lives in California, me in Washington DC. Opposites sides of the continent. For now.
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autumn-wind Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005
:hug: it's a great poem! :) don't feel too sad.
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